點擊查看：2011年12月英語六級真題及答案專題  

　　Part I Writing

　　【高分版】

　　The Way to Success First essay—stream of thought type

　　The Way to Success

　　"Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration." And here comes our question, what is the way to success?

　　A strong will and great efforts are the most essential two keys to the door of success.

　　Why do people fail to achieve their goal? The reason is that most of them give up halfway due to their lack of a strong will once they encounter any difficulty. A man of a strong will always sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be.

　　Would Thomas Edison be such a great man in history if he had done nothing but possessing a strong will? We are all familiar with his story that he had tried one thousand kinds of materials before he finally made his great bulb light up. Without hard effort, Edison might have been a nobody. Without efforts, no one can succeed.

　　To sum up, a strong will and great efforts can help one open up the way to success. Where there is a will with efforts, there is a way.

　　【作文解析】

　　本次六級考試作文題為The way to success，與本次四級考試作文Nothing succeeds without a strong will遙相呼應，大同小異，都是在討論成功這一話題。

　　此次六級考試作文的話題依然是老生常談，即通往成功的道路，相信很多考生對此并不陌生，背過范文的同學寫起來肯定也是得心應手。

　　該范文段落結構清晰，闡釋說理也足以讓人信服，是一篇不錯的作文。

　　開篇作者通過引用愛迪生關于天才的一句名言來引出問題，吸引讀者注意，引起讀者的思考。緊隨其后，作者就開門見山地亮出了自己的觀點：只有堅強的意志和不懈的努力才能打開成功的大門。

　　第二段，作者同樣以一個問題來引領全段，引發思考。然后通過對比不成功和最終成功的人的不同表現，來闡釋堅強的意志對獲得成功的重要作用。

　　第三段，作者進一步闡釋“僅有堅強的意志，沒有實在的努力，也能成功嗎?”同樣是先發問，然后舉了愛迪生的事例，來證明答案是否定的。舉名人的例子，而非個人的實例來作為文章的論據才更有說服力，這也是這篇作文的高明之處。

　　最后一段，作者先以第一句話進行了總結，然后為了加強作文結尾的力度，作者還對名言“Where there is a will, there is way”進行了改編，換成了自己的觀點，為我所用，這也是本篇范文的一個兩點之處。注意，寫作文時對名言進行恰當地改編，不僅能體現幽默創新的一面，同樣也體現了作者不錯的文字駕馭技巧，考官也是很歡迎這樣的文章的。

　　【標準版】

　　The Way to Success

　　Success is something everyone looks for, longs for and dies for. But have you ever considered what success is? Some may hold that success means one has beautiful life, like pretty house, cool cars and great power. It’s indeed one way to define success. But to me, success is doing something one really feels like doing.

　　To achieve this kind of success, one has to bear in mind three essential prerequisites, namely knowing where your interest really lies in, possessing the strong will to pursue your interest and having the diligence to realize your dream. In other words, they are “what” “why” and “how” of success. It’s really luckily good for one, especially for the younger generation of today to find their dreams, follow them and in the end, make them come true and become successful.

　　Although it’s never easy to succeed, progressing with the strong will and diligence towards the right direction, you’ll be the one!

　　【作文解析】

　　這是一篇議論文。作者首先提出問題”what is success?”,但并沒有在這個問題上著更多的筆墨，而是直接引出了自己的觀點：success is doing something one really feels like doing. 算是立意較為新穎的地方。隨后在第二段對這種成功背后的三種必要條件做出了闡述。整體看，行文流暢，用語規范地道。

　　本篇亮點：

　　1. 排比詞組或句子的運用：

　　Success is something everyone looks for, longs for and dies for.

　　…namely, knowing where your interest really lies in, possessing the strong will to pursue your interest and having the diligence to realize your dream.

　　2. bear in mind

　　3. lie in

　　4. strong will to pursue your interest

　　本文有待提高之處：

　　1. 文中人稱有些混亂。有些使用第二人稱代指讀者，有些又以第三人稱指代，建議統一。

　　2. 結構上，一般情況下我們建議考生使用典型的“三段式”，即，提出問題、分析問題、解決問題。該作者基本上遵循了這個原則，但第三段更多的卻是重復了第二段的中心思想，并沒有起到很好的總結作用。如果第三段，作者可以與第一段的“成功定義”相呼應，例如：即使沒有這些身外之物，但心靈上的滿足，夢想的實現，才是我心中成功的本質。

　　整體看，文章在語言表達和立意上還不錯。但在文章結構上有些松散，有待提高。