十一分。你學(xué)習(xí)范文非常用心，從詞到句均如此。你悟性很高，繼續(xù)修煉，必成大器。

2.貢獻老師的扇子…斗膽貼作文上來,請老師幫我看看.

1.媒體（廣播，電視，報紙，互聯(lián)網(wǎng)等）對人們產(chǎn)生著越來越大的影響。

2請比較兩種不同的媒體的各自的特點。

[原文] Nowadays, media such as broadcasting, TV, newspaper, Internet are playing increasingly important roles in our daily life. The media provide billions of information so individuals can enrich their knowledge and enlarge their horizons. The world is so large, but we can gain the information through a TV screen or just a mouse click(單擊鼠標是這么說嗎?)(這段關(guān)于媒體的重要性的描述會不會太少了,能不能給一些好的句子?謝謝!).

It’s obvious that everything has both positive and negative aspects just as every coin has two sides. Now I desire to list something about the advantage and disadvantage of TV and Internet.

TV, the sign of traditional media, provides fresh information, colorful pictures and wonderful advertisement. The soap operas are the favorite of housewives. However, the costs of TV advertisement are a bit expensive and the pictures are too transient to seize.

Beside TV, you can gain the information all around the world at anytime, anywhere instead of letting them slip by. Internet also brings many problems. For one thing, there are millions of information on it, some of them are rubbish(這里我本來想說這些信息中有不少是關(guān)于暴力,色情的,不會寫,應(yīng)該怎么寫呢), they are harmful to us, especially to teenagers. For another, there are a sea of false information on the Internet and the legislation of it is not well enough(我本來想寫目前關(guān)于網(wǎng)絡(luò)的立法還不健全,給那些不法之徒以可趁之機,也不會寫...).

In the fast-information era, the Internet, the newly medium become much common and more acceptable. And the traditional media, still affect our daily life at the same time. In my eyes, both the traditional and newly media will make a big progress in the coming days and a brighter future is waiting for them!

用了些您模板中的詞句,但總覺得寫得還差強人意,希望老師再幫我好好改改,打個分,謝謝!!另外,天氣炎熱,老師可得注意身體哦.

[修改] Nowadays, a variety of media such as broadcasting, TV, newspaper and the Internet are playing increasingly important roles in our daily life. The media provide so much information that individuals can enrich their knowledge and enlarge their horizon. The world is so large, but we can gain the information through a screen at any corner of the world.

(單擊鼠標是這么說嗎?) 對，但原文此句總體不好，宜修改。請參考改后句子，或者改為：

The world is so large, but the information we need is only a mouse click away.

(這段關(guān)于媒體的重要性的描述會不會太少了,能不能給一些好的句子?謝謝!) 可以，此段不宜太長。

It’s obvious that everything has both positive and negative aspects, just as every coin has two sides. Now I desire to list the advantages and disadvantages of TV and the Internet. (此段冗長，改后亦未完全解決問題，再改：As every coin has two sides, TV and Internet also have their advantages and disadvantages.)

TV, the sign of traditional media, provides fresh information, colorful pictures and wonderful advertisement. The soap operas are the favorite of housewives. However, the costs of TV advertisement are a bit expensive and the pictures are too transient to seize.

Through the Internet, you can gain the information all around the world at any time and any place. However, it also brings many problems. For one thing, some websites provide harmful information such as violence and pornography, which is extremely harmful to all of us, especially teenagers. For another, there is much false information on the Internet – the relevant legislation has loopholes in it, and those people with evil intent take advantage of them.

(這里我本來想說這些信息中有不少是關(guān)于暴力,色情的,不會寫,應(yīng)該怎么寫呢)

寫作violence和pornography。

(我本來想寫目前關(guān)于網(wǎng)絡(luò)的立法還不健全,給那些不法之徒以可趁之機,也不會寫...)

我已寫了，請參考。

In the fast-developing information era (原文此處有誤), the Internet, the newly medium, has become much more common and widely accepted (此句細想，與原來模板句情景不同，所以要改變寫法). And the traditional media still affect our daily life at the same time. In my eyes, both the traditional and newly developed media will make big progress in the coming days and a brighter future is waiting for them!

努力啊，在詞與句上一定要多練，多想，祝你進步！七至八分。遇到不會寫的，多查，多琢磨，再不行就放一下，第二天再來，再不行就問老師，此法極棒，請試一下。范文的經(jīng)典句子有些用得不大對，是因為沒有深刻揣摩的緣故，請深思。