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　　AS Is(注意大小寫) shown above,a funny hen claimed that her eggs with(that后面應該跟的是從句，從句中應包含謂語動詞，建議將with改為have) no edge and the like which is the most fundamntional(拼寫錯誤，改為fundamental).(作者這句話是要表達什么內容?)Simple as the drawing is ,the symbolic meaning behind ti(改為it) is as deep as ocean(注意句末標點)The honest is not only necessary,but also indepensible(拼寫錯誤，改為indispensable).As the old Chinese proverb says."Honest is gold."However,in no country other than China,it has been said that,the problum(拼寫錯誤，改為problem) of opposite the pormise(拼寫錯誤，改為promise) more serious(句子邏輯關系不明確，改為the opposite of the original promise is more serious) ,and people fail to attach attention to the "gold".Individuals and organizations can make money,take porfits(拼寫錯誤，改為profits) and even obtain wealth by attend promise.To be honest can also have added (改為add) benefit of increasing one's knowledge,giving us a new perspective of outside world.According to a survey conducted by China Acadmy(拼寫錯誤，改為Academy)of Science(CAS),honest can relieve not only pressure but also anxiety and such problums(拼寫錯誤，改為problems)as depression,stress,isolation and solitude(注意句末標點)All in all,obtain(改為obtaining，一句話中只能有一個謂語動詞)the promise plays a key role in our daily life.The unhonest(改為dishonest，表示“不誠實的”，沒有unhonest一詞), in view of the complexity of such issue,we must treat it socially,economically and culturally.with(首字母大寫) a proper law,an up-to-date solution,a right perspective and alert public,it will be a matter of time before the problum(拼寫錯誤，改為problem) becomes things of the past.(最后一段缺乏邏輯關系，建議重寫)

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